Okay, firstly, Holly talking with Jade was great, I really liked how they connected and it was nice to see more of Holly, especially her history and her own thoughts about what she is as an omega. The part about Jade's mom letting Tori in was also very powerful. And of course, another great ending line. 'Hug-slut', heh.
I loved how you opened the last chapter, with Tori being so clueless and it was so hilarious, everybody's comments to her on it, especially Trina and David (You're going to love your mate... With your body."/"Happy first heat orgy, or whatever."/"If you use it for kinky sensation play stuff, I'm never going to forgive you."/and Trina's last line was pure gold). The prelude was just as good, I loved Tori being upset with Beck, and Sikowitz was brilliant ("I have tragically been forbidden by the school from encouraging nakedness in my class"!)
The sex... fisting isn't my kink, but it was extremely hot and incredibly intense. Better even than the one where Emma fisted Emily. I found it very realistic and powerful, and enjoyed how despite Jade seemingly losing control if her inhibitions, she still retained that part of her character which doesn't want to be controlled, and how Tori recognized that, and knew when to take control herself. Seeing Jade's point of view after it all was also great, as was the reciprocation. I know we probably won't see more of this, but it was a great journey, and thank you for it all.
A final thought: "Let's just say, you wish you had a knot like she does. It's like double your best, and she can tie for fucking forty minutes." Guess Jade was telling the truth after all... ;)
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Date: 2013-01-18 01:26 pm (UTC)I loved how you opened the last chapter, with Tori being so clueless and it was so hilarious, everybody's comments to her on it, especially Trina and David (You're going to love your mate... With your body."/"Happy first heat orgy, or whatever."/"If you use it for kinky sensation play stuff, I'm never going to forgive you."/and Trina's last line was pure gold). The prelude was just as good, I loved Tori being upset with Beck, and Sikowitz was brilliant ("I have tragically been forbidden by the school from encouraging nakedness in my class"!)
The sex... fisting isn't my kink, but it was extremely hot and incredibly intense. Better even than the one where Emma fisted Emily. I found it very realistic and powerful, and enjoyed how despite Jade seemingly losing control if her inhibitions, she still retained that part of her character which doesn't want to be controlled, and how Tori recognized that, and knew when to take control herself.
Seeing Jade's point of view after it all was also great, as was the reciprocation. I know we probably won't see more of this, but it was a great journey, and thank you for it all.
A final thought: "Let's just say, you wish you had a knot like she does. It's like double your best, and she can tie for fucking forty minutes." Guess Jade was telling the truth after all... ;)